WRITING - ABANDONED PLACES

ABANDONED PLACES - WRITING

Our learning goals are to:

-write a description, using powerful words and phrases

-include some Te Reo Māori

-carefully check that our sentences make sense and have correct punctuation and spelling.

For my writing I chose this image

Here is my writing:

I exit the vault I’ve been living in for the past 10 years, almost instantly I feel the heat, the radiation, the fear…  I scan my area. All the houses are destroyed by the nuke, all but one. I walk through the sand, suddenly I hear sand shifting around. ROAR!!!!!!!! An irradiated monster called the Deathclaw hops out of the ground chasing me. All I can hear is my own heartbeat. Suddenly I remember my gun. I look to my pocket and there is a 10mm pistol. I turn around to face the monster and… BANG, BANG, BANG, BANG, BANG, BANG, BANG!!!! The Monster falls to the ground as I run to the house. It’s flooded with sand and at the door lays a skeleton. It looks nearly 50 years old, the same time the bombs dropped.

I walk past the skeleton and try to open the door, it’s locked. Nothing a few bullets can’t fix. The door opens. I look at the walls and I can see paint about to fall off the wall. Even if I were to poke it… The paint falls to the ground revealing a hidden safe. It wasn't even locked. I open it and there is nothing but a piece of paper saying “Under the rug”. I turn around and grab the piece of paper and continue inside the house. There is sand flooding my boots just as much as the nuke flooded this whole city… Walking through the house I see the kitchen filled with pots and pans. I see two skeletons. One is holding a pan with blood on it. The other’s skull looks… Dented. I realise what had happened inside this house seconds before the nuke.

Next to it, I see a rug. The only one in the house. I look at the piece of paper, I know what I need to do next. I lift up the rug revealing a trap door. The door creeks open loudly and I climb down to the whatever lays below… “Hey you! How the… How did you find us, get out of here!”. I shout back to them, “Hey I’m just looking for supplies I didn’t know someone lived down here!” “You know what to do now, get em Fixer!” I hear gunshots as I fall down to the ground unable to move...